Thread:Hakimiru/@comment-24366645-20140428023010/@comment-24380832-20140502163903

These are roughs and need to be polished more, but as a general idea...

Breunor:

"無事に親父の仇を討つことが出来たのは" = "Me being able to successfully avenge my father"

"きっと機関がオレを受け入れてくれたからなんだ" = "Was definitely thanks to the organization being kind enough to take me in."

Probably better reordered and as (tossing out some of the minor parts) "Thanks to the organization (or Knights of Round) taking me in, I was able to successfully avenge my father."

"いつかはきっと、この丈の長い隊服が似合うくらいオレは大きくなる. " = "I'll grow, and one day undoubtably become big enough to fill this large uniform."

"だからさ、その時までオレ達の絶対的ボスでいてくれよ" = So please, remain as our absolute boss until then. (there should be a better word than absolute, which is the direct translation, but nothing is coming to mind... he's basically an unshakable, pillar of existance to them.)

"オレもっと、大きくなるから. " = "I'll grow, I promise." (bit of artistic liberty here, but I think this probably fits better than a direct translation. When he says "larger", it can mean both in physical size, and also personal growth, so I tried to leave it ambiguous to cover both. And the だから here is like "I'll grow, so...(previous sentence)", but implied stuff is a bit iffy in English, so I went something with a similar effect.)

Bedivere:

"私はまだ、来るべき日の約束を果たせていないんです. " = "I still have yet to fulfill our promise of "the day to come".

"なのに、あなたがいないとはどうゆうことでしょう. " = "And yet despite that, what do you think you're doing being absent?"

"私は、あなたがいてくれるだけで、あなたの側にいられるだけでいいんです. " = "I'm satisfied with you just being here, and being able to be by your side."

"どうか約束を果たさせて下さい. " = "Please, let me fulfill my promise."

"ずっとあなたを、待っています. " = "I'll be forever, waiting for you."

Mordred:

Not really wrong, but I probably would have gone with "So that's what it was, after all." for "やっぱり、そうゆうことだったのね. ".

"だけど、らしいっちゃ、らしいんじゃない？" = "But I guess that's like him." or "But I guess that's his style." or something else. "らしいっちゃ、らしいんじゃない" is literally something like "if you were to ask me if it's like him or not, I'd say it's like him.".

"もう、私には何の関係もないんだけどね. " not wrong, just wanted to add possible rephrasing: "Well, it's not like it has anything to do with me anymore, anyways." (probably too many any___'s orz).

"だけど、責任くらいはとってくれないかしら？" minor detail, but "くらい" is at least, so perhaps "But, could you at least take responsibility?" might be better.

"私だって、それなりに戦ってあげたのよ. " = "Even I, have done a fair bit of fighting for you after all." (それなり = "somewhat/a bit". ___なり = "in ____'s way". e.g. 彼は彼なりにがんばった. = He tried hard in his own way.)

"まぁ、期待しないでいてあげるわ. " = "Well, I won't expect too much from you."

Gawain:

Seems fine for the most part, a few minor things:

"少しでも、パパの力になれたかな？" = "Was I able to help Papa out, even a little?"

"頑張ったご褒美だよ、絶対だからね！" = "It's reward for trying my best, so you absolutely must, ok?"

And I guess I'll wait for you to try the rest~

Are there any sentences where you have trouble understanding why I got what I did? Please feel free to ask, and I'll try to explain.