Thread:Hakimiru/@comment-24366645-20140428023010/@comment-24380832-20140506063855

"だからさ、その時までオレ達の絶対的ボスでいてくれよ" = So please, remain as our absolute boss until then. (there should be a better word than absolute, which is the direct translation, but nothing is coming to mind... he's basically an unshakable, pillar of existance to them.)

I think calling him an "absolute boss" carries tyrannical implications in English, because whenever you hear that phrase it's followed by talk about authoritarian governments and dictators. Would calling him their "indisputable leader/boss" work too? (´−｀) That's perfect! It fits better than the choices I was struggling with.

Breunor:

"無事に親父の仇を討つことが出来たのは" = "Me being able to successfully avenge my father"

"きっと機関がオレを受け入れてくれたからなんだ" = "Was definitely thanks to the organization being kind enough to take me in."

Probably better reordered and as (tossing out some of the minor parts) "Thanks to the organization (or Knights of Round) taking me in, I was able to successfully avenge my father."

I was wondering for this one, is it okay to translate "親父" to old man? I know he's talking about his father, but there's something about the sound of him calling him his old man that I really like ^^; Yes, no problems there. 親父 is sort of weird, in that you can pronouce it two ways, with different degrees of casualness. I think the more casual one here fits, better, which would suit your version.

Thank you for the corrections! I can see where I went wrong. I'll fix them and also work on rewording them, you wouldn't mind reading them over again when I'm done right? As a side note, Mordred’s second line made me laugh, it’s going to be fun writing hers up this time.

Of course not! Thanks for going to the trouble of doing these, in additon to the regular updates >w>

I haven't translated much of Uwain's (and only briefly looked at Lancelot's), but this is what I have so far.

Uwain: "あーそろそろ眠ってもいいかな？　え、ダメ？" = Ah... Is it alright to rest soon? Eh, no? I think "yet" might be a better fit for そろそろ instead of "soon", but otherwise, looks great.

"仕方ねえなぁ. " = It can't be helped. Is this correct? I've read before that "仕方ねえなぁ. " is just a speech variation of 仕方が無い", but what I can't seem to figure out if there is a proper way to translate "ねえなぁ", as he appears to be elongating. Should I just put a tilde at the end? :P

And then I'm at loss on the rest... Except for maybe the last sentence, I think he's saying that Lions shouldn't go to sleep angry?

Yes, it's just a casual version of 仕方が無い. Sort of like speaking with a drawl, of sorts. I think maybe just try to make it sound casual? Something like "No helping it, I guess"?

Sort of loose, but for the rest:

でもさ、だったらそっちこそ、さっさと目を覚ましてくれないかな. But in that case, isn't it about time for *you* to wake up?

いったいいつまで、目を開けた夢を見てるつもりなのさ. Just how long do you intend to dream with your eyes open?

ほら、さっさと起きろ、お眠の眠れぬ獅子様もお怒りだぜ？ Come on, get up. Even the napping unsleeping lion gets angry too, you know. (Uwain is known as the Unsleeping Lion, so he's saying that even he'll get angry if he doesn't wake up.)