Thread:Hakimiru/@comment-24366645-20140428023010/@comment-24380832-20140430011344

Chikalin wrote:

[Tristan]

You’ve fought sufficiently. This thing, no way came out of my mouth. If you do not come back to work, I will be troubled. Till then, I will serve in your place. Even now, forever, I am only your right-hand man. An extra one while I'm at it~

もう、アナタは十分戦ったわ. I know it's super tempting to translate "十分" as "sufficient" (I know I did it a bunch when I started) but it's a traaaap! "Sufficient" almost never sounds natural, and ends up making things sound weird >_<. I'd probably go with "You've already fought enough."

なんて、私の口から言えるわけないじゃない. So close, it would be right if it's 言う, but she used 言える, which is the potential form (ei. *can* say). Being a little more flexable with structure (keeping tone), I'd probably go with something like "Did you think I could possibly say something like that?" "There's no way I could possibly say something like that" would probably be closer to the original, but I feel like the tone is a little different, especially since doesn't work as well in English, imo. Really more of a stylistic choice at this point though.

アナタにはもっと働いてもらわなきゃ困るのよ. Seems fine to me. It's a little stiff, but it's hard to make it not. As a potential stylistic equivalent, a very loose translation of "I still have work for you to do." might work.

だから、早く帰ってきて. "So hurry back." (I'm assuming you chose to absorb this into the previous sentence).

それまで、私がアナタの代わりを務めるから. Sounds good to me! Potential stylistic equivalent: "I'll carry out your duties until then.".

今でも、いつまでも、私はアナタだけの右腕なのよ Phrasing for this one is a bit hard, because アナタだけ is like "only for you", whereas in English it's easy to misinterpret "only your" as "nothing but" or "merely". It's still not great, but maybe something like "I serve as a right-hand man only for you, now, and forever"? Hm...still needs work =w=